Comments of chapter undefined of GOT: Alexander Baratheon
GOT: Alexander Baratheon
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so my opinion about your fanfic is that it is good, but it has a lot to improve. I've seen a lot of people talking bad, but I think they're exaggerating, because if they don't like it they wouldn't be reading the chapters and honestly I think what you're showing is the MC's personality is very cool, but it needs improvement, because you put it as passive in a lot of cases, but I don't know what you have in mind in the next few chapters, but I want to give some advice it doesn't make the MC have a Harem because I think that sort of thing is too far-fetched, especially in worlds that it doesn't have bigamy, like Harry Potter.
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