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the author so I wish you could put the MC's encounter with his sister, the one who appears in the last season of Lucifer's show!
so my opinion about your fanfic is that it is good, but it has a lot to improve. I've seen a lot of people talking bad, but I think they're exaggerating, because if they don't like it they wouldn't be reading the chapters and honestly I think what you're showing is the MC's personality is very cool, but it needs improvement, because you put it as passive in a lot of cases, but I don't know what you have in mind in the next few chapters, but I want to give some advice it doesn't make the MC have a Harem because I think that sort of thing is too far-fetched, especially in worlds that it doesn't have bigamy, like Harry Potter.
Muito bom sério, gostaria de aprender com você autor, pois acho o seu modo de escrita muito legal. [img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
Ivy Potter