AStoryForOne
Try get the mc to calm down abit if possible. I feel like with the amount of memories and knowledge the mc has in his head he shouldn’t be so quick to anger especially about something he already knows like his own lack of skill. The majority of the novel so far is great but the mcs character starts feeling alot like child that gets angry whenever something doesnt go his way and even may lose control any time like how he did in dxd and skyrim and basicly came off as a over emotional angsty teen. While i know you mentioned his devil side and dragon heart etc but with hundreds if not thousands of years of memories his way of thinking and acting should atleast be a little bit mature and calm like heck he even had a emotional outburst against himself even tough he knows better… Dont get me wrong, this chapter itself isnt that extreme but its still making the mc come over as a more and more angsty teenager by the more chapters that pass. While I understand that the mc is only like 15 or 16 years old right now but i refuse to believe having the memories of a antique like zelretch wont have any impact on his character or at the very least make him act mature calm and accepting like recognizing that you need training instead of getting angry or counting to three and remember that you love rin like a granddaughter before you go full rage mode at yourself. I like the novel, but atm your just writing “angsty child with kaleidoscope” and outside of childishness and rashness i cant give the mc any other real personality traits atm and zelretch memories seem completely irrelevant in anything except for giving him access to the kaleidoscope. No offense meant with this post just stating my opinion
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