Abadom
Well. I just finish binge reading it and it was great ride but i feel lack of balance? You write much of word and decent amount of details but story barely move like chain of incredibly detailed scenes but not flow. Like that chapters full of mc's inner monologue about what he should choose. It's character development from first sight but you can shrink it to 1/3 and keep effect. There's also lack of his social life or anything else except of system windows and event that lead to that windows. It's not good flag if novel only about system. And after all: good job!
One thing I can't understand, why did the title (the great desire of) block his direct acquisition of the transential fragments. They would seem beneficial, and the title doesn't seem to have a problem with other outside stuff, like the origin fragments etc. Would the transential fragments/unique skills have harmed his potential or something, since impo skills are always better to have than items?