Comments of chapter undefined of Cosmic Peak
Cosmic Peak
LivingVoid
Chapter comments35
very good 1st chapter soo... interesting 😍 But this chapter also has many mistakes,I would say silly errors and some big mistakes.... 1stly grammatical errors and tense errors. 2nd dialogue between characters feel bland and without emotions like preloaded computerized dialogue. Same with MC's mother and the Uncle Ben character, dialogue without emotions. 3rd i personally would like mention of expression of character during their conversation then i would know what type of face character is making while conversation. It would make scenes of novel descriptive and readers would easily imagine the image of characters. 4th is dialogue of the supreme being was not effective and lofty enough. You should have (only my personal suggestion) written the dialogue in bold letters with some type of bracket like [ ] or only bold writting without anything. And also system notification should have written in between this [•••] bracket instead of <•••> this. These are my personal feelings and suggestions. I don't like imposing this novel is yours and yours only and all and everything in novel should be as per yours imagination as you are the God of this Earth planet inside your novel. I very much enjoy your work and congrats you for this great novel. Thank you for an amazing 1st chapter experience .....
