Comments of chapter undefined of Daily levelling with my Option-Based System

To sum up the troubles in the chapter, follow these points: - There is no indication in the beginning about 2 Shawn(s), it arrives too late after a lot of confusion. - The punctuation is missing, at times there is practically no full stops, commas. And the sentences have unnecessary spaces. [Possibly check it via PC] - The distinction between the speech and thoughts is messed up. Usage " and ' carefully in required. - New Shawn, transmigrated one arrives in the world and fins himself in the classroom, but the whole scene is missing. There's no world/atmosphere development about it. - Everything is vague, at one point we see that he is transmigrated then the next moment a new day starts. [Excuse me, what?] - The students in his class, their dialogues seem misplaced. At one point there is something like this ["Oh he can't do it" (3)] what's the number for? - Tenses need an edit, stay in one tense please. The chapter starts in present while next is past. And at times the usage of accurate words is required. [I won't believe it that I can't figure out the system] It should be "I don't believe it....." - The chapter ends without any hook, something that can make readers go 'Oh whoa! I should one more chapter.' - Lastly I would suggest to read [death and me - by Suiyan] It will cover up all the flaws above. Good day~ <3