Comments of chapter undefined of Avatar : How to become a Badass
Avatar : How to become a Badass
RokyesLt
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This dumb drama you got going on is already ruining your story and we’re only 10 chapters in. Its the fact that you created a timeskip, and during that time that was skipped over, you had mc being in a relationship with one of the main characters Not only that, you put it in the story out of nowhere. “Oh btw my ex with Asami.” Now whats EVEN WORSE, is you’re making it seem like a borderline NTR plot. They were forced to break up by Asami father cuz hes a bender hater. So mc obviously likes her still, while she still thinks hes some cheater. Then you have her DATE Mako who is ALSO a bender. Everything with this plot is just so dumb
I don't think it is really necessary for you to force Hanzo, Asami, and Korra's relationship. You can continue to develop the MC's relationship with Korra as well as Korra's relationship with Asami. You can make it so that Asami decides to end her relationship with Mako as the relationship was not going anywhere and she starts getting feelings for Korra as in the show. You can show how Asami starts making advances towards Korra and Korra either appreciating it or not understanding her motives. Later on, when Asami finds out her father lied to her, she would probably regret doubting him and maybe want to get back together. She (without knowing that Korra is in a relationship with him) can then go to Korra to consult with her on what she should do about it (since they should be good friends) and maybe try and get some 'comfort' from her. From there you can create a sort of love triangle with Asami still having some feelings for Hanzo and her feelings for Korra and eventually have Hanzo dating both of them. Although, I do admit, it sounds a bit forced.
I'm okay with the drama, from what I've read the problem isn't that he still like asami but that she didn't trust him. this could actually make the drama better with the distrust being an ongoing thing for the MC (not a major thing but just something to further develop his character) and to eventually overcome. you could even have asami gradually distance herself from mako(relationship-wise) once she starts figuring out that her father lied to her (you could have her start questioning her previous relationship with the MC after they turn in her father but with the MC wanting to get with korra at this point he could tell her to "drop it and forget about the pass") this could lead to her having a similar relationship with korra from cannon except with the MC and if done right you could have asami and korra become BI instead of gay and give the MC his happy ending with both girls.... anyways these are just my thoughts on what you could do( you can ignore it if you want) but what I do what you to hear is that this is a great story and I love it. I can't wait to read more please keep up the great work.
the relationships are realistic and very much liked by me,the way it's written is great and just...this is the best avatar lok I've read by far for how realistic it is with actual relationship troubles,also korra ripped under those clothes,which is hot,keep up the good work author and don't listen to those haters,who think with their dick.👍😁
