Comments of chapter undefined of Harry Potter and the Boy Who Lived
Harry Potter and the Boy Who Lived
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the fic was good until this point, but i am sad to say that if you werent going to let harry compete, you might as well have not written the past however many chapters since the tournament was announced and all the MCs work to make it. frankly, im disgusted by the cop-out at the last minute after the build up for this. yes, we all want our POV character to do well, and when they dont, you sometimes have audience issues. The problem in this case for me is that most of your readers will have wanted to see a different tournament. even if calypso made it in, instead. no damn point in retelling the same story again. the triwizard is the central plot point this arc, because you have made it so. making the MC a side character to the main plot when you have none of the other established primary characters participating is just stupid. there is no attachment to the main plot now. at least, not for me.
ok, after listing all my grievances with the direction of the story, i have to say harry's reaction to the news of the champions was poorly done. someone doesnt work that hard for that long to achieve a goal, especially coming that close, and just shrug it off. i dont care if his brother is being targeted by being a champion. he can feel more than one thing at a time. to use hermione's words, not everyone has the emotional range of a teaspoon. overall, i think the writing in this fic has been pretty good so far, and got better after harry made it to durmstrang. but i think the ball has been dropped here, in more ways than one.
Well that was disappointing, it goes to show how little of an impact Harry actually has. His accomplishments are meaningless, his ambitions amount to nothing. Honestly this story had a great start that lasted till he got whipped, after that this story took a nose dive. Good luck giving Harry a prominent role when Voldemort comes back with how useless he is as a character, he is simply not growing fast enough to make any real impact.
Author I just realised that the goblet of fire is the perfect catalyst point for creating a large rift with his family. When harry and the other champions are taken or confronted by Voldemort he can confront Voldemort and use the killing curse Avara Kadavra... And well let's just say that nathan sees him using said spell, and well we can all kinda sees what ensues in the aftermath. The confrontation can occur due to harry applying some kind of new enchantment to either viktor or nathan that allows him to either detect or apparate to them. Honestly, that's just what came to my mind.
The best chapter I am happy to see Harry not being chosen because if he were a champion he would win and at the time he would take the cup and enter the cemetery in Nathan's place, since Harry wanted to win the tournament to show everyone how he's good and get out of his brother's shadow. but what he didn't notice and that he is already much stronger than his brother, continue with the story, it's great like that
