Daoist_Little_Yun
I mean we have already known he’s naive. Repeating this wont change anything. He has zero backstory. we dont know what he did growing up. He is naive. Aleshia has more screen time than our supposed “MC”. You’re just digging a bigger and bigger hole for yourself. I dont see how this is going to improve unless you stop writing everything from Aleshia’s POV. The only way we can see MC grow is if you actually write about him!
Ok, this is getting ridiculous. Are you telling me his father, who is probably grooming her son as successor has just kept MC in a box up untill this novel started. Are you telling me son of an merchant and noble if I got that correctly doesn't know value of money and doesn't have quite a bit of knowledge and experience on how to deal with people? At this point it feels like MC literally spawned into existence when novel started instead of being 16 or whatnot.