Comments of chapter undefined of My World Traveling System: The Harbinger of Death

Hello Author Good day to you. I Hope you don't get angry of what im about to say. because this is an advice after reading until nowand it is truly from the heart as i wish this story to get more readers in here. after reading until now. i've got to say it is one of the most interesting novels i've read the story is great that is why it definitely has huge potential. if we're talking about PLOT / Setting / Style / World / Theme / MC All is good... the only thing that should be noted is Dialogue / Development. Characters and more importantly quality over quantity. i can see that you are trying to make this novel long. want to increase mc characters dialogue and point of view without paying attention to how long conversation can be and is it should be in that circumstances? also matters.. my only advice is to pay attention to how mc and characters dialogue and don't make it just long. thats it. thank you. keep the great work up

thanks for the chapter

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Will we hear the Vampire matriarchs talk with her daughter?

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Thanks for the chapter ! 😁👍