Paradox_
Why have ur fights turned less descripive? 1. In the original, u used alot of comparisons to describe how hard someone hitted. "Enough to cleave a mountain in half" etc. Its minimal in the rewrite. 2. Less descriptive interms of environmental damage. You used to use a ton of words that hyped up fights, which made every fight filled with goosebumps. Its the little things that add up. The way you described this fight in the original clearly showed the ginormous strength difference between damien and hyogoro. Yet here, it made them seem alot closer than they should be.
Its not just this fight, but previous fights aswell. Its missing the "comparative" aspect of ur fights, where u used to acutely describe how powerful and destructive an attack truly is. The writing is still top notch, enough so that new readers wont tell the difference. But comparing it with the original, the battle descriptions have changed. And tbh, i would really put emphasis on these small things, since it really puts emphasis on what this novel was about: "Path to Power". The thing with hyogoro wont seem much, but the difference, as a reader, really shines. Just dont take too much attention away from battles, power scaling etc. Since this, in my opinion, is what makes ur novel so great.
Paradox_:If you're comparing this chapter alone than I would have cut it shorter. 2900 words is too long and we just had some combat last chapter. Anyway, it's not like Damien is trying to kill him
The times really are changing with all the things that are happening in this chaotic era. Things definitely escalated for Damien and Toki. Good thing that the old man came to stop the fight that Damien and Hyogoro were having with each other. And is a good thing that they were able to get an audience with Kozuki Sukiyaki through Hyogoro's mentor. I look forward to reading how the meeting between the shogun of Wano, Damien and Toki will play out in the next chapter.