Comments of chapter undefined of Naruto: Systematic Shinobi
Naruto: Systematic Shinobi
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A entire chapter that had about 30 seconds worth of conversation and the rest just has him thinkng of random unrelated unimportant topics in his head mid conversation I hate when stories blow past important things without proper detail or context but this is the opposite problem you could take out 75% of the mc's internal dialogue and it would very much improve the flow of the conversation and plot you should save the high levels of internal dialogue for when the mc is training or alone
I had a suggestion I advised you to take Mc grinding in to the direction of he him self to be like the tailes beast himself in chakra quantity... And Mc should try to change his chakra it self by compress it Also he need to take his control over his chakra to exceed the humanity limits.... Also I suggest that Mc sage mood be related to dragons transformation And its not a normal sage mood that is only active temporarily but a passive mood that active all time 24/7 Mc turn himself in to dragon himself in the shape of human... It will be good if his hair color turn silver... I suggest that Mc gain fire element
