Comments of chapter undefined of The Tale of the Void Emperor
The Tale of the Void Emperor
LivingVoid
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At this point, tiana is just leeching off of the mc.... everything she has, she got from the mc... author just made her get a cultivation heaven, out of story, and be useless She wants to be worthy for mc( which i don't think she is) but does by leeching off of the mc U could have given her an arc where she goes to wild or something to train ..get into life death situations..show her determination..but no she got mc sugar mama.... didn't have any qualities.. didn't do anything for mc...there are so many things ugghhhh.... Even her character introduction was cliche.. beautiful girl..young master..mc beats YM.. takes her home .they fall in love without any reason...she got random power ups..(outta nowhere a flower comes..and u learn it was always there.)..but still is lower than mc so mc gives her safe heaven...now she out of story..) Its not even occasional..she just out of story and get talent (at least will get after coming out or will still leech off of mc) It's hilarious how she wants to be worthy of him but.. does so by leeching off of him and doesn't do anything for the mc..even now) An example for good FL with same settings is Liu Mei from monarch of time..in that..the mc just like here, has talent, super treasure, super technique...(still better mc than this one)but still she has a unique dao..she has fought a lot... although she got her technique from the mc but only that...which was also risky but did it...also she fought in life death situations..not like here with golden spoon FL.. I hope you do something about it..and at least she gets things fro her.....herself and does something meaningful to the plot..like if you remove Tianas character..things will be same in the story..... Damn even the white enrgy she has is she got from mc...please atleast give her something unique..for which she pays a cost...or hard work...not just automatically gaining things... U can give her some character arc where she do something for the mc and plot..at this point she is just out of story sitting in heaven
For starters, I would like to say that I’m truly loving the story thus far, despite my opinions on the female lead. And I obviously understand that what I might say has already happened since I’m still reading and isn’t caught up to current chapters. Also, I would like to point out and compliment you on how much you truly care for your novel, unlike other authors. Who doesn’t take their take to respond to commenters but, you do even the ones that are constantly complaining or finding fault in how you direct the story. However, I do remember you saying that the title would actually be addressed and something relevant in the story. So all I’m suggesting since I’m not an author and am a reader like many others is that. Since the title is “The Tale of the Void Emperor”, the main character Athan should have the dominating characteristics and personality of a soon-to-be emperor. Or some sort of character progression/realization arc that will thrust his character forward to make him feel, act and appear to be more like a void emperor. (Seeing as he was ruthlessly and senselessly killed in his previous life) In addition, when I think of Void in a magical aspect I think of something that is infinite in space and timeless, mainly time and space. Although he has time with few spells he lacks time and lacks spells altogether. Yet, despite my annoyance with the FL which you have gotten too much slack because of. Despite that, I admire you for your storytelling capabilities and love the third person telling too since it’s all a TALE, and I hope you could read and comment on this hopefully.
yeah, honestly dropping it now. it's so easy to simply make the companion have their own power, so many novels do it, heck author tried early on with the flower then seemingly forgot about that and made her into a giant leech. should have just let the flower be something that lets her comprehend some passed down inheritance really fast, so she keeps up with MC in her own way without just leeching all his benefits.
This doesn't feel like a full novel for some reason. Its like i am reading a summary of some sort. Villan comes, gets taken care of in three same chapter. Mc out of Power, get a training time skip and boom....it just feels like someone just wrote the vague idea of a novel into this. No depth in any character, and. I am not asking for much, but even to this point, i am not rooting for the mc at all. It just has some cardboard hai cutouts acting as characters.
Why did you do the Super expert giving ultra-OP item, because they were dying route.. Now I it seems that he isn't at all special and the only reason he seems OP is because someone gave him something. I though maybe he was born with some unique void affinity which caused the black whirlpool, but now it just seems boring. There are hundreds of stories where the mc is given an items that allows them to comprehend and use 9000 elements when normal people can use up to 10-20. Now there is no mystery to uncover, because we know what that whirlpool is and how it got there. There might be something special about him, because they did give him the whirlpool, but we don't know anything about it so it doesn't generate any interest in reading. If you had let the trapped girl mention that the mc has some unique talent and that's why they gave him the whirlpool, then it would cause interest in what that talent is. You also should have made the trapped girl be more clueless, so that she doesn't explain everything. Maybe just have her say that her parents were chased, she woke up in there and an imprint told her that Athan will protect her. Nothing else. Much more interesting. Then when the whirlpool reveals more abilities it will at least be a surprise..
