HideousGrain
Author, at this point that the plot is going well theres just one thing I've noticed in both novels to be frank, we have the mcs first think what theyre about to say many times and then give the answer which is very similar but a detailed version of the thought which we just read, plus the coversations of the mcs always seem like theyre giving a detailed answer in an interview, its too detailed and well doesnt seem like a conversation at times but a student giving detailed answers at times, unlike other characters the mcs dialogues dont show much personality but seem like very detailed answers, not to say i dont appreciate the info but conversations are too rigid most of the times, theres no casual conversation most of the time, even when casual it comes off a little rigid and we cant see the mcs personality in the way he talks, especially when he thinks it first in the monologue and then says the same thing it kinda gets wierd to read at times