Comments of chapter undefined of God´s Eyes

Hopefully there the 'Supreme/Godly/Complete' version of his mother's eyes. They have got to be OP if it took this long to fill the mana in them right?

Mr. Author. Others things aside I would like to draw your attention to the society you describe in this chapter, it’s already written and for a hobbist-young writter, decent enough. You described how people are prodigy or trash, no society or individual is like that, even if it’s militaristic-based and strength is valued highly. Look at Sparta or nomadic tribes for example and educate yourself how society trives, because if it’s not growing, someone will overtake it. There are no “trash”, even those with no talent have their usage in a society, no matter how low they go. In a modern day you also have 100 non-combat specialists in the army, and 1,000 outside of it for every soldier you have. You can describe the military as the elite of the nation and only militaristic schools to be the road for high government positions, so even louzy military school is a better choice then elite fashion, but you cannot have a nation of which 99% are martial artists and nobody take care of their needs. Keep those in mind in your future work. The closer you are to realistic representation to our own world, the easier it will be for thereaders to understand differences with less explanation. You can also check Sanderson’s lections in utube for more writting tips.

Okay so good so far I like it and the details

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wow he go to body ascend, and got extra 1000 perception if he success

The poor grammar is almost unbearable. I'll give it to chapter 10 to see if they incorporate an editor before I drop it. But jeez is it trash quality. Already notice plot holes, but I can live with that if the main story if worth the read.

Thank you author i really liked the first three chapters because it told me the entire backstory of how mana came to be etc and i think it was a good way to start a novel

Cool

To be fair I was expecting a bit more from the novel I found at the top of a list. Maybe it has better writing later on...

thanks for the chapter

nice

Thanks for the chapter~🐱

Let's see where this goes

Noice

Interesting that every beast and human are compatible.

I don't like the MC's backstory at all. Being made fun of and labeled a parasite because he is blind? I kind of wish this human society was wiped out during the initial invasion.

Forgot what hurts you, but never forget what it taught you....

so far so good

Right