Comments of chapter undefined of Game to Live
Game to Live
Simvolick
Chapter comments11
not much of a fan of no response as one of the only people to read it, and also since I've been spending coins since you started releasing, also wasn't exactly happy to wait a month, to pay for the chance to know that you gave up writing it, and again, then made people pay to find that out... that's just rude...
OnionRerouted:you wrote a good book, you deserve loyal readers, they just take time to come, the actual quality of your story is about equal to early mutagen, you just need more time to develop the story, gain more confidence in your skills etc, it's difficult to find original work that is new and intriguing, your work just needs polishing, don't assume it's bad, because it isn't, it just developed a lil too fast, the advantage of a fantasy concept though, the development doesn't have to happen sequentially, you could have the MC go back to his kingdom after he stabilises his cultivation and then have slow development afterwards for a short while, before he experiences rapid growth again :)
I liked it, I just thought it developed too fast, the story itself was interesting and the development of the ember, his MC cheat skills etc worked well, it just felt like the story would end extremely early, despite being a massive world with countless storylines and multiple obvious side characters for him to befriend etc... as much as I love the ending, I would have rather'd he developed his empire in a world full of every piece of fantasy BS you could think of, filled with other earthlings with similar gamer mindsets...