Comments of chapter undefined of Earth's Alpha Prime

Innate ability - “loot”. it’s about time it became a superpower.

For me personally the whole system genre has a flaw, the story should reveal at some point (even much later is ok) the origin and goal of the system, most don’t or make it really childish like reasoning. Aside from that hope that stats are not the cliche type and have math/logical relation to physical abilities. Health is always terrible statistic to put numerical value. Give the character status and buff/debuff type of things as well as “stamina” as numerical value. Example stamina is exausted during activities and replenished as well, then some activities lower it faster the normal like fighting and sprinting, and sleeping replenish it faster. very low stamina leads to loss of strength or agility, unless you have “iron will” or something. Broken/bruised arm give you penalties etc. Ask your doctor on how many points will measure your health :)

If your going for super human characters/ hero's make sure to show the reader most if not all stat improvements instead of skipping over it, this is super important in system novels. Think of it as a game, if you are playing it, you want to see each and every level up same goes for the readers. I know that writing numbers and stats can be a drag make a document with the stats on it so you can copy and paste them over to your writing to make it easier. Also on a side note If in the future you add human interaction please don't water your story down by adding to much comedy, don't get me wrong some humor is good but if too much is added it can distract and even ruin a good novel. A little romance could help a system slash hero story, It adds a little spice, but at the end of the day this is your story not mine so do what you feel like and remember to have fun its your hobby. My hobby is just to read your work lol

As for the [STATUS], Health, Stamina, Spirit Energy should be listed before Life Energy. While Tier should be listed after Level but before Health. Example: [STATUS] Name: Age: Race: Level: Tier: Health: Stamina: Spirit Energy: Life Energy: Strength: Vitality: Endurance: Agility: Spirit: Luck: Undistributed Stats: Innate Talent:

nice chapter

So far I like it. It's well written thus far and the main character seems to be bright and level headed (so far), which I love. I cant wait to start the next chapter.

looks good, thanks for the chapters.

Loot, very intriguing.

Good, the chosen weren't based on potential, but that innate ability thing. Otherwise, logically, only the smartest, toughest and so on so forth humans would be chosen. Most of the time, what matters is whether you are capable, not potentially capable. But in this case it's the latter.

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hmm

Thanks

smart man dont panic quickly grab a few items that will help you mainly a weapon and provisions

Thanks

Muito bom!

Interesant

How many stats does a normal average Healthy person have?

hmm

So good so far.