Comments of chapter undefined of There Were Two Brothers

This story has potential. The only thing that’s troubling me is the grammar and the pronouns you mix up.

Decent amount of information here, I mean you didn't just info-dumping every information you have about this book thus it's decent. Just problems with tense since there are mixtures of present and past

Chapter 1 is great build the world have conflict between group of people. I want know what is main character name, so I have center character point-of-view that I am follow through this world. Overall, chapter, Nice build up the world.

Strangely, I enjoyed this chapter

So the queen Lota is the most powerful one. Hmm, I wonder whose side will she take or would she turn this all to her advantage. Btw the description of the whole situation was good and clear, it helped me getting an idea about the war.

I'm very interested in the strong so far and I'm wondering how long it would before Queen Lota gets involved.

Interesting royal struggle 🤴👸

I just started reading but I'm loving it so far. Love the simplicity of the story and I'm eager to read it to the end. Thumps up author ♥️.

ok liking it so far

The start is intriguing [img=update] Can't wait to see how Hyena messed up.. lol

I liked the story's description and the first chapter hooked me.

I couldn't visualise what Donn looked like. She randomly popped up during the meeting with hyena.