TreasurerOfDreams
couple of mistakes I noticed. I'm the title it should be Didn't not Doesn't. "Cultivation was this easy? How come I didn't know?" secondly where Su li says "Err, Sister Lan is cultivation was this easy?" you want to either remove the is or the was. 'is' is present tense and 'was' is past tense. generally speaking you want to keep the same tense through out a sentence.