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Looks interesting
Both parents with dark hair, the child blond... whar’s the neighbors hair color is what I’m interest in.
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You need to work on sentences, they are too long. The fourth paragraph is one huge sentence and that can put off the reader, amazing pacing though. Love this
I'm confused as yo how Ra'g understood the creature when it's from another planet. Shouldn't there Be a language barrier?
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