ranmaro
Its a awsome story but i want to ask reason mc making this group of people stronger as subordinates,friends or what. Bcoz as an old man he should know not to tell them secret or they will spread them.Other thing is he contract pet they asked them for themselves,he make a ring they askeed for it also. Its more like father taking care of childerns.
Hey author, I like your idea about the story, but there is sooooo much plot armor... Please make it more believable... It's crazy how he finds all the materials for the ring just there in the woods... Isn't it supposed to be something special? Or how Madly does have her items for forging with her... The reason being her grandfather... That isn't really a good idea. It's seems like you did write it on a whim because you thought a ring would be nice and just wrote it like that. I like your story setting, but please let your main character struggle and fight for every step he takes. Up to now it seems like he gets whatever her wants... Oh and the ring itself... How come that time is standing still in there, so meat doesn't go bad, but otherwise he can also take fire in there to barbecue the meat? Why do you have to contradict yourself? And if both really is possible, than it's just to overpowered... Just some thoughts to help you improve your story. A fan who likes to see your new heights in the future. RiBBoN