Biako
Why does just hate him? I guess it's because of his obsession. But hopefully we will come back and see their perspectives... but that really is cold, I come from a good decent family so I don't fully know how it's like in a dysfunctional one. But still Shen didn't seem like a bad person to his kids so did it really call for murder? ffs he's already 70 he'll die in about 30 years maybe allittle more at max!
Everything is told to the reader. There is no emotional connection. The story is still being set up and I realize it takes a bit to really get into the meat of the story but I should have some measure of investment in the story by now. I've none. Failure to engage ones audience looses one possible readers.