Alexander_the_grey
This was getting way out of control, not explaining MC´s sudden shift in personality or if he was so smart he could have stopped the animal in a more peaceful/subtle way or the whole explaining to his friends which will put them under a lot of stress/danger. and what about the whole primitive way of thinking of wizards? i get it that some of them are like that but you cant honestly expect me that they still think earth is on center and the sun is orbiting around us, if a society is like that a lot of things would have been very different. This is pretty good fanfic, which i would have liked to see finished but it has so many plot holes that is a chore to actually read it....
i was just writing a example, you cant make mc suddenly have those breakthrough and make all those new inventions ( basically you are showing that at a very young age mc is smarter that a lot of wizards that are almost 10 times his body age) and make a mistake like telling his friends his secretes, if he was THAT smart , he would have solved the conflict in a subtle way without endangering anyone. You have to decide if he is 11y.o or 11y.o+his previous life. Its a very inconsistent mc. Its impossible for some species that live almost double our age to not have the curiosity and drive to learn more.
Havoc76:Because from their point of view the Sun does revolve around the Earth. It doesn't matter if that's not technically true because practically it is true. Do you honestly believe everything we know today is 100% factual with no room for improvement? If the universe really is infinite then the Earth might as well be at the center of it.
Oh no, he told his closest friends a secret that Dumbledore, Snape, at least one imprisoned DE, and potentially those who were at the trial depending on how much was revealed, already know... How stupid of him! The sharing of secrets happened in other FF so you must do something different! ... People really love whining mindlessly...
I don't really mind mc telling this, I mean it's overall not that big of a deal if people are trustworthy. But what was really weird was all the drama, honestly this was like fight over some grand secret between a married couple :D Also Christian's reaction is like weird af o.o Honestly this was so cringe. It's like mc murdered his mother or something.
True friends aren't like that. They accept you as a whole no matter what your secret is and you explain it or not. They will forever by your side no matter what the situation is and without condition, helping you in dire times of need without asking for something in return or forcing to spill you secret. That's what means to be true friend. You, as the author making their friendship like this, make it seem like a barter or a trade situation. On one hand his secret and the other his friend loyalty. So, it is basically not a true friendship like this.
sinceramente este capitulo e fue completamente fue de lugar, de como se comportaba el prota, de como manejaría una situación, desvelo sus secretos como idiota es la palabra correcta y creo que era totalmente innecesario, que dijera que tenia un fenix que le metieron partes de que criatura, el dialogo se podia haber manejado de una forma completamente diferente y mas profesional sin entrar en mas detalle.