Jozan
I lIke that you have a clear and solid path for your beginning, the characters are well described as well. My one criqtique is, watch how much you use words in one block, idea Or scene. A good example is the word “children” The scene seemed a bit crowded and redundant because althoug the reader was already very aware of who they were, it was as though you thought you were having trouble driving the point home. That made the scene redundant and threw off your flow.