Sister is not likable Perhaps thats intentional If not, work on it Again character devopment is lacking both physical, intellectual and emotional
Timeline issues contInue ITs not believable that Hunter droppec out of school at 10 years old Make it more realistic Help reader to care about these kids
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Let’s begin this review then
World development weak explanation are lacking but well mc doesn’t seems the intelligent type and more the one going with the flow but i do hope you have an explanation as for why his phone would have gone off before his sister console
