Comments of chapter undefined of The Great Demon System

The Great Demon System

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FeasaoLv12Feasao

I hope the narration improves . The characters speak in an unrealistic way and their motives are questionable . Oh and whats with the caps?Noone talks like that

3yr

FeasaoLv12Feasao

the imagination is there and if you are such a young author , its understandable. I will pull through and see if you grow as an author . The system is very good but the narration drags it down a bit .

Drip:Caps only stop after like chapter 120 😥😥. As for the talking, I was trying to simulate teenager talking to make it feel realistic but I might have missed the mark. (I am a teenager myself so I thought I did good)

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Apostle_of_cthulhuLv4Apostle_of_cthulhu

Guess what time it is...THATS RIGHT TORTURE TIME!!!

3yr

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Snoodle_BooperLv4Snoodle_Booper

Can't tell if she's internally dying from laughter or annoyance (when pretending to like nathan) .... But one of those is definitely happening... Probably laughter

3yr

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