Feasao
I love reading Chinese and Korean translated novels
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long and hard like my pp
Part 2 of notes for author; Why the cussing? Just use other sentences , using f.u.c.k. with dots just disrupts the flow of the story . Also did you really make a supposedly pristine head of a family with other guests at a party shout f.u.c.k. no?This doesn't make sense
Another couple of critiques since I read this far; A question is a question . Stop using an exclamation mark instead . Also you use way too many exclamation marks where a simple full stop would suffice.And one last thing , the dialog needs work . Its just unnatural . Nobody talks like some sentences in here . I suggest to envision like you are speaking to someone rather making grammaticaly correct sentenses.
Review after 1429 chapters- Its definitely one of my guilty pleasures . I cannot recommend you reading it , from the bad grammar to the lack of a main enemy or a challenge for the mc , everything is crap , even more subpar for this crap genre in general . But , I must say , if you just want to see " Ha ha , op mc goes brrrr" with a semi-unique system , you will enjoy it either way.
That painted quite a picture cause serviette in my language means sanitary pad. That was hilarious