Comments of chapter undefined of Rebirth Of The Evil Vampire Princess

I am interested in the characters , although at times it seems a little disjointed as it jumps around to different times and places. I am sure the author will eventually pull it all together and it will make perfect sense . You might want to get a different proof reader as there are numerous times he/she or him/her are exchanged, although sometimes it maybe due to the brother and sister’s names being so close. I don’t mean to be so critical as I am enjoying the story line. One last thing, I have had many friends in my life, a couple of BFFs, but never have we fallen all over each other like our two ladies do. I would not be surprised if one or both declared their love for each other. I hope I haven’t offended anyone, if so I apologize .