Comments of chapter undefined of Traveling Through the Multiverse as a Chimera Ant

Well, my constructive criticism is ... He should eat more diverse monster. And evolve more =w=) and gain more perfect form

and yes why have he not started practicing any of the haki ** give him conquer's haki as in future it will help him avoid the usual mob lvl fight setuations

nothing much but that eros blessings is a no no if u don't won't to make smut/hentai/catch em all type novel as it really destroys the romance part of the novel so I suggest to down play the blessings like make it into endless sexual stamina, ability to control sprems(when to make the girls pregnant ) like some lines which the girls have to recite during Cu mming which bounds them to MC so no chances of getting NTRed something like that

in my opinon he should add fish man karate to his own martial arts plus become a monster prodigy in swordsman ship like zoro he should master all haki too though he would done that anyway

so there are a few things in which my personal taste comes into play 1: i feel like most people would enjoy romance but having more than 1 or 2 lovers usually makes the story dull and i ruins the immersion you feel in a good fighting type story which is what i think should be the main focus of this story. 2: I Personally Don't like spending to much time on chapters about slice of life, or Romance cause it causes people to lose interest and complain about the story not progressing and ultimately causes some authors to drop because of a simple mistake. These are some of the point which i think you could improve on. Im going to give you some advice even though im not an author, I recommend to write about 3 Main objective you want to have in this story 1. _____ 2.______ 3.______ And i want you to focus 90% of the story on these main points be they Romance, Fighting, Getting Stronger, Training, Anything you want, BUT NEVER STOP USING THESE POINTS, if you stop using your objective then you will end up not liking your own writing and you will lose the will to write causes most people end up not liking their own writing because they stray to far from where they originally wanted to go. This has been all my points that i wanted to shar with you and i hope some people take these to heart with future authors (The first two are mainly my taste).

i will tell you what I think should be changed you should change your attitude where you think you should change things based on what other people say and you should write this book how you were going to write it cuz I like how this book is going and it should not change based on people that are not writing this story and therefore that is the change that I am telling you to change don't change the book cuz the book is already good

honestly I like it. I feel if you try and accommodate everyone you will lose out on the quality of the book. I did have a question though. Is he not going to eat anymore people/giants/mink?

also personally I'm fine with a harem type catch em all, for some reason lots of people aren't but I say do what you want tho I def want a big harrem, just make sure to stay on task with the story progression tho you could make lots of the story progression getting the girls, so long as its thought out I think you could make it really good. btw pls ignore all the dumb asses that are only wanting 1-2 girls, its fucking one piece, the land of babes, u better fucking have all of them in the harem, if people complain then just say that it makes more sense since its part of his biological instincts and that the works has different laws compared to our own so huge harems are very common

there is not much of diversity of monsters in one piece except the aquatic animals so he can't do much about it except when he he world hops

You do you its your book but if you feel that the quality is going down from your own perspective then you can just rewrite it and i think its fine so far

I recommend not changing anything you don't want to. I recommend reading all of the possible changes and if any of them stick out to you do it. if you don't like what you're writing then you won't want to continue it. good luck

I like the book just the way it is

So my selfish and subjective opinion: 1- His abrupt change when he met Nami: He was described as a monster. A logical being striving to be the strongest with a misplaced pride about his race. Even when he get his human memories, he stayed mostly logical. So when he met Nami, he shouldn't have started soloing. She was robbing him for **** sake. I understand that she's a canon character and knowing her motivations he couldn't have just killed her (albeit it would have been refreshing (** I like Nami)) but come on. She was robbing him. 2- Your definition of genetics. His second goal is to expand his genetics (even though I don't understand how he came to this conclusion) by mating with powerful girls (girls with good genetics). Firstly, he doesn't not need to be in relationship with them. Just impregnate them. A nightstand is enough or at worst rape. Anyway, I digress. His choice of Nami beside the fact she's a canon character and beautiful in fanarts: What good genetics does she have? Big Mom has good genetics. Even if we consider Devil Fruits powers as transmissible genes, she doesn't or didn't have any. Alvida would've been a better choice in that case. From a logical POV, it doesn't make any sense. 3- I should have see this one coming when I knew it was a harem. The IQ and EQ of the characters. You should have precised that the characters would be OOC. Nami acting like a shy virgin and it wasn't an act. The same Nami that flashed Luffy, Cobra,... just for money. The same Nami that use her charms for anything if it would be easier. Now her accepting to be part of a harem. The argument is that powerful person have harems. Who in One Piece does have a harem? Even Big Mom that's the closest doesn't have one (and she doesn't even know that). And I imagine that all future girls would be so accepting. I'm not against harem far from it, I prefer that in most story but I like it when it stays logical. I would've been fine if they were just enslaved, if their mind was rewritten by an all powerful system (when their affection reach 100 they become yes yes slaves),... But I hate when the girls become stupid. I always say that harems are better in culture where the ideas are accepted or when MC rewrote common sense just to get an harem. If you can find a better reason for her to accept it would be good. 4- Make Nami strong enough to beat Arlong in 2 months with a stick. For this point I have to explain how strong I think Arlong is. I don't think he is less powerful than Hody Jones. Imo, he would have won against Luffy if he wasn't immune to blunt damage. I already explained why I find the staff and martial arts ideas stupid in previous paragraph comments. 5- Since his meeting with Nami (even since he gained the system) he abandoned his evolution way and is only focusing on getting girls. 6- I hate the system, I hate the titles, I hate the stats, I hate the quests, I hate the shop,... in short I hate the system. It was funny when he killed an idiot MC to get it but it went downhill afterwards. There's also some inconsistencies here and there but nothing a little editing can't clean. Good luck.

please don't stop writing also add Hancock into his harem

I like it the way it is, and when are you posting more?

Personally I think that the Mc should go hunt stronger monsters and consume them so that he can evolve. (This is not an urgent thing that needs to be done as the story is in the early stages overall. So I think that you should make this an all story thing. Basically he always hunts strong monsters, or kills them if he comes across them and doesn’t just ignore them. As according to his species [Chimera Ant] he will always want to evolve and gets stronger. The reasons could vary from things like just wanting to become stronger and better himself or go for a more ego related route and do it because someone is catching up to his strength or is already stronger.) For the writing all you should do is ego over the final product before you post a chapter and check for any mistakes and fix them. For example double words eg. And And. Apart from these points the story is overall solid and enjoyable. So keep writing mate. 👍👍

Hmm my only criticism is that his devouring aspect has taken a back seat, but that can easily be fixed in future chapters you dont really need to go back and change previous chapters just reintroduce that bit in the future .

he should evolve more by eating the animals on those werird islands like the place luffy trained( dont know how to spell it) and sea kings also marines that attack him and pirates he should fully become a chimera ant and eat whatever including human and fishman he should also train in haki.

show more chimera antness in the mc UK he can just go to calm belt and eat the sea kings and that iisland eater as well