AlienWarlord
I wanted him to be heavier in his words, but it’s not bad either. however something that must happen, is that he does not forgive easily, even though he certainly knows that there is a manipulator behind it. and I don’t care if things end up between them (it would be interesting if it happened, and also since it can be easily manipulated, being next to him that will certainly have other machinations, it doesn’t work), but I don’t think it will happen, just make him pay dearly for forgiveness (letting her run after him, **** he is a prince, with a system, basically "invincible", it is no small feat.)
Your chapters are really short. I feel like I waited a week just to see the MC have a uselessly short nonsensical argument with a girl who has no common sense. If I have to wait so long for a new chapter to be posted at least give me something to chew before I copletely lose intrest as a reader.I am a fan and like the general theme of the story. I just feel it needs to be fluffed out a bit more in each chapter to give a greater sense of plot and character development.
While I commend you for sticking to your guns, and trying to fix their relationship in your own way. My practical self is coughing blood from frustration, reading your methods. It would have been much easier to just admit that you messed up their relationship, and rewrote the last chapter then continue from there on. It would have been much enjoyable to see actual progress in their relationship, for being engaged for 6 years, and not have to read about Syrin pining after only to get shot down by a retarded princess with her equally retarded suspicions.