Comments of chapter undefined of A New World, an immersive game experience

Plenty of detail as he first learns, then you can simplify the description of the process later. We certainly won’t need the precise full description of a complex Tier 7 lattice, if he ever even goes that far in magic.

bruh this story is gold. were you influenced in any way by the legendary moonlight sculptor? the motivation is completely different of course, and yours feels way less gamey and childish. more polished. I also feel that you need this level of detail, at least at the beginning. it ain't too wordy, and the conversations make sense. Mc is acting like a curious child, which makes a lot of sense. Also Vivian rival/love interest foreshadowing much? That is the one thing I'd improve upon, as it is the only thing that feels rushed to me.

Three questions: One: Should I split the paragraphs to be smaller, I write from my PC on big screens so it only looks like a few lines. But it seems to take the entire screen on my phone. Do you feel it would be better if I split it, not just when the focus shifts? Two: Let me know if my writing quality, or flow weakens. Do to university starting again I am spending less time on each chapter. Like today it was around 2 hours to edit this one and write my new one. Three: Should I make a discord or something to discuss stuff on, or not? I feel it is still to early, but let me know.

Personally, I like things more detailed as it helps me understand and picture the things being described better even without a visual aid

yeah real magic

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please explain magic stuff

thanks

details are great

thx for the chapter

Magicccccc :)

Thanks for the chapter!! :)

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Thanks 😊