Comments of chapter undefined of Death Note: The New Kira
Death Note: The New Kira
dipforthechips
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Dude what did he do? Depending on what you did there I might drop this It had potential but depend on your answer if it's only hit her anything like no big deal
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Lemilion:You did not understand his point we can see that he's bad but what did he do to her?? we can see that he is bad guy but what did he do to her for her to act weird? if it's only he hit her and she's afraid of him but anything more than that might earn you a lot of drop so you should precise it for example modify the next chapter and precise that the reason why the mc is torturing him is because he hit and made her afraid and only hit
