XiaoKongxu
Can someone explain to me how âpunctuation could use some workâ seems to be the biggest critique anyone has posted for this? The only paragraphs of this chapter that donât have some kind of problem are the game loading/start lines at the end. The complete lack of commas in this chapter isnât the only problem here; thereâs also bad sentence structure, no use of contractions, mistakes with tenses, and a few instances of poor word choice. I really hope this dramatically improves in the next couple of chapters, since the premise is really interesting.