Comments of chapter undefined of Epic of Caterpillar
Epic of Caterpillar
PancakesWitch
Chapter comments65
Not a fan of Harem but I could tolerate it if the story remains as great and won’t start revolving around the Harem, like giving them the good stuff that she could have gotten for herself or her being told what to do by her partners, yada-yada. What weirds me out though is the thought of a humanoid having romantic/sexual moments with a bug, especially when the bug is of different size. So please tell me that s/he/it would evolve into a humanoid being next chapter because I don’t think I can stop myself from puking if she didn’t because now it’s confirmed that she is with Zehe so there would be romantic/sexual scenes. Also, could you kindly specify her gender? Thanks. Like I know that she is of the female sex but he seems to consider himself as male but he hasn’t confirmed it and only said that he prefers women. Or if he’s non-binary. I just need to know so that I don’t feel bad assuming genders, even when they’re just fictional characters.
- Thx for the chap. - Brontes humm ... Cute is Justice so is OK - I love how her minds seem more clever than the original and energic mind is a real bro omg xD. - ReehMHuss is right on the thing of not let Kireina do ANYTHING for her multiple mate, she is Queen here and please after evolve in succubus or similar you need make her have a change in mentel for she like male and female alike even if more female and make her pregnent like just for the fun of this x) - Man for her Mega room you need upgrade this step by step by the other without Kireina notice with bed for Rimuru, Nesiphae and others who want MC. And don't forget make Zehe her mate in the kingdom system in the next chap ^^ - I already see the face of Zehe the next day with a Loli human form Kireina in her arm ^^
...alright, I *highly* doubt you (PancakesWitch, author) are still reading new comments on this chapter at this point, considering how far you have moved past this at this point. I only have a couple of things to say, and none of them are meant as attacks - consider this constructive criticism at most. I actually like your main character quite a bit. Kireina is a lot of fun, and his mental/emotional state and motivations make sense. I agree with most of the other commenters about the romance feeling just a tad bit forced at this point in the story, but NOT for the reasons that they say. A lot of people said it is "cringe" but I disagree. I just think that things are happening a bit too quickly here. The feeling that I am getting is that a romantic relationship is developing in a very, very short period of time... but that COULD be due to the Succubus's Curse. If it is from the curse, I think that should be clearer... and if it's from the curse, then Kireina would (I think) perhaps feel a bit more conflicted about it? At the very beginning, I felt that the speed at which things developed was very, very effective. However, it has actually SPED UP quite a bit since it started, whereas I think it would have been more compelling if it had slowed down a little bit for character development, exploration, etc. ...sometimes I have a little bit of difficulty knowing who is speaking. I understand that you don't want to use "[Person X] said, 'Dialogue here...' and then listened when [Person Y] replied 'More dialogue!' --" all of the time, but on the other hand not using any sort of indicators as to who is talking requires the audience to guess, which is not always clear. Generally, the saving grace to this is that each major character has a pretty distinct manner of speaking. ...I've drawn a LOT of comparisons to KumoDesu (So I'm A Spider, So What?), but fortunately that is my favorite LN series! I do not think you are problematic for 'copying' anything. ...I also do not see the same issues that some others do with gender identity. It is all well and good to have a solid answer as far as gender identity as a general rule, but Kireina's confusion and difficulty with gender is CLEARLY a major problem for (him) and a *plot/character* point which will eventually be resolved. I think you have a lot of potential as a writer and I really like your passionate nature about this. I really hope you come across my comment someday. Congratulations on your overall success. I am enjoying this. Thank you for sharing your writing.
