hey, I'm still enjoying it. I've... I've left quite a few comments on the past few chapters I've read. i guess I got excited! gg.

...wow, a lot of criticism here. I thought this chapter was great, I think the action is written very well. Action is clearer as to who is doing what/to whom (clearer than dialogue/who is speaking in a large group, I mean).

... she's evolved two times but is still a vampire. the vampire weaknesses are still in her skills, and it's definitely a magic shield that counteracts it, not her undead nature... I had been assuming it was night too.

that's specifically @Maelstrumo, the user who said "I'm quitting this if she doesn't grow the actual limb back, I can't stand it when authors cripple their characters, durr!" btw. Not @ anyone who just, like, was confused.

I don't mind adult scenes, but in all seriousness i hope there's variety. If it's going to be the same thing night-to-night, then a fade to black style would be appropriate. ... forgot to mention this in earlier comments, but the "internal thoughts" that are being done with parentheses took me a bit of time to catch on to - is that method FROM something, or is it original? Normally in literature, even LNs, internal monologue is handled a few different ways; regular dialogue will be handled by "normal quotation marks," and internal thoughts are either 'surrounded by apostrophes' or ‘surrounded by accent marks‘ or just italicized (can't italicize comments, but I assume you can in the novel text). Or there's always the prosiac ----"....." they thought. --- style, but given your penchant for avoiding that general practice of writing I'd assume something different like one of the first examples. The parentheses work too! I only ask because I didn't get it at first and I'm curious as to whether you came up with it on your own or whether you saw it somewhere.

... ... ... ... ... I hope I'm not the ONLY new reader that you get from the article naming this as one of the best web novels. I seem to be the only one commenting (though I did wait quite a few chapters in before choosing to comment, and I'm not going to comment unless I actually have something to say... tbh it's annoying AF to me when folks comment with something meaningless).

strong disagree. dragging a romance out for way too long obviously isn't great, but this could have used more time to develop. I don't think it was "cringey" either, by any means, but I do think that a bit more interaction between the characters would have benefitted the story. I am enjoying it a lot still, though. ...and yes, before anyone asks, I am fully aware that I am commenting on something from years in the past. *ahem.* >bump. ...there, are you happy?

...alright, I *highly* doubt you (PancakesWitch, author) are still reading new comments on this chapter at this point, considering how far you have moved past this at this point. I only have a couple of things to say, and none of them are meant as attacks - consider this constructive criticism at most. I actually like your main character quite a bit. Kireina is a lot of fun, and his mental/emotional state and motivations make sense. I agree with most of the other commenters about the romance feeling just a tad bit forced at this point in the story, but NOT for the reasons that they say. A lot of people said it is "cringe" but I disagree. I just think that things are happening a bit too quickly here. The feeling that I am getting is that a romantic relationship is developing in a very, very short period of time... but that COULD be due to the Succubus's Curse. If it is from the curse, I think that should be clearer... and if it's from the curse, then Kireina would (I think) perhaps feel a bit more conflicted about it? At the very beginning, I felt that the speed at which things developed was very, very effective. However, it has actually SPED UP quite a bit since it started, whereas I think it would have been more compelling if it had slowed down a little bit for character development, exploration, etc. ...sometimes I have a little bit of difficulty knowing who is speaking. I understand that you don't want to use "[Person X] said, 'Dialogue here...' and then listened when [Person Y] replied 'More dialogue!' --" all of the time, but on the other hand not using any sort of indicators as to who is talking requires the audience to guess, which is not always clear. Generally, the saving grace to this is that each major character has a pretty distinct manner of speaking. ...I've drawn a LOT of comparisons to KumoDesu (So I'm A Spider, So What?), but fortunately that is my favorite LN series! I do not think you are problematic for 'copying' anything. ...I also do not see the same issues that some others do with gender identity. It is all well and good to have a solid answer as far as gender identity as a general rule, but Kireina's confusion and difficulty with gender is CLEARLY a major problem for (him) and a *plot/character* point which will eventually be resolved. I think you have a lot of potential as a writer and I really like your passionate nature about this. I really hope you come across my comment someday. Congratulations on your overall success. I am enjoying this. Thank you for sharing your writing.