God damn, this was the most unique, interesting, satisfying and, hands down, amusing first chapter of any novel I have ever read.
But by god, if you put emojis into the chapters, I'll smack you on the head with a tentacle.
yo what the **** just happened he went from not knowing what was happening to being able to just absorb soul power and a bit of chaos energy because WILLPOWER that makes no sense whatsoever
did anyone else read this chapter in a monotone voice? everything went from 0 to 100 in .0001 seconds. even though he was an average Joe there should be more to the back story. how did he learn to absorb the "mist"? and process it without any guidance. this chapter has me lost
Mmm grammar is good the form is overall good with some weaker points,the story seems interasting it 's also a change from the common trope. Pretty good chap
It looks interesting, and the grammar is great, but there is something wrong with the writing. It would be best if you didn't use "our mc" or "back to the story" lines; they break the immersion.