The only problem is how they don’t have consistent gender descriptions. His becomes her and than back to her.
It’s ok that he refers to himself as him and his body and her, but Choko is going from male to female every other paragraph.
Really fun story, I like the system being basic and not world overwhelming right off the bat, a bit of struggle is nice. Maybe watch if the girls get creepy. But thanks for all the hard work and great job so far!