Note to author: When you write amounts, either write it in all words, or all numbers.
3,000 or three thousand
not 3 thousand or three 1000
Everything else is quite good so keep up the good work.
"The Weapon Guild looked a lot like a warehouse he had once burned down."
Me:"Alright then, wonder what it looked like to remind him of that"
"It was a large, ugly rectangle building with many large ground-level windows that let in the light."
Wait, so most buildings ever? WTF
How to break character..make him an arsonist a guy who dreams fire and finds joy in things burning to ash....but make him buy a rifle cuz u know background doesnt matter...they reveal it hahhaah
I’m just starting I don’t really see the issue it’s a game and some people can unlock something unique to them, our lil arsonist clearly had a fire affinity whether he wants anything to do with it anymore or not
I’m really enjoying the story so far! The MC is truly interesting, everything is well written, and I like the sprinkling of political themes. I’m interested to see what direction the story goes from here! 😄👍
Very intresting start, great writing style, and very intesting story. Sadly mc is not a mage which is a no no for me, and fire arms just turn me off in a fantasy world, good luck with the story u have a great talant.