Comments of chapter undefined of Reborn in DxD world with a Fate System
Reborn in DxD world with a Fate System
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Sasuke hasn't the Rinne Sharingan, he has the supreme rinnegan, the Rinne Sharingan Is superior that the supreme rinnegan, the Rinne Sharingan Is the eye that juubi and kaguya in her forehead have, also being called jubbigan, wish the main difference between both them, Is the rinne Sharingan Is red and has one circule and tres tomoes More in the eye that the supreme rinnegan has and obviuslly has more skills
Please please tell you aren't going to do the devil clicha bull the dxd writers are obsessed about cant you makeing the mic a devil the cannon of the story sucks cant you make home have the power of karna and have him go after the Hindu faction his father( meeting) indra and vishnuu ( the duchbags) because in the fate verse and the myth its they screwed him over setting him up to die since birth and taking his weapons and abilities at the final battles because he would slaughtered his enemy even then he wreaked them he only died because his ally betrayed because the previous two promised the army something and he got shot in the back which was a big no no at the time sorry if this seems like a rant i just love the character and i don't think he got what he deserved . ** ( and for the people who say he cant beat gods of their levels i agree with you if it was the fate verse in dxdvrse well a talent magus from fate ( fate humans were on island + their in the age of the gods fateverse) can wreak havoc in that verse so what would a god heir heroic spirits do to the DxD verse )
i dont think they will make him a devil as his own bloodline from his mother and father is superior so if they make him a devil and try to make him a slave they will most likely react. best would be system saying he had a bloodline but its uses and abilites are unknown something but it can let him get strong
"When she was about to run her over, a boy came from behind and pushed her out of the way, dying in return." The truck is a she? Should be instead: When the truck was about to run her over, a boy came from behind and pushed her out of the way, dying in return. ---- "...for reward for saving me I can grant you three wishes you want. " Should be: As a reward for saving me... --- "The goddess was very irritated when talking about them" You started the sentence in the past and all of a sudden jumped to the present. --- Another thing. This could sound pedantic, but please take note. A good writter does not need to point out who is speaking, ex: "God random 1: ". As he can easily make it apparent in the dialogue itself. Example, "Write anything you want, and at the end of the sentece you write, such a person said, or spoke, or reiterated, etc. If the speaker is no relevant and not deserving of a name, just write, a randoom God/person/passerby spoke. As you develop your story, you won't even need to point out who is speaking, even if it is not a monologue, because you can insert certain ways in which each character speak, or give small hints in the dialogue. It isn't really necessary to know every time who is speaking. Neither is it necessary to tell us when you swich POV. Just drawn a line to indicate the end of one narrative and the beggining of another. Anyway, no need to take this to heart, just my sense in which you could develop better as a writter.
Inb4 author reincarnated him in DXD world but not making this a harem lmao As for whether he is a devil or not, well it's hard because most of DXD interaction was from issei POV or a devil's Well if author didn't made this a harem or stray too much from the original story because him didn't contact the original plot a lot Might as well build an original world that is similar to DXD world except different chara
