Legion20
I like that he is evolving, but it feels slightly too easy. A lot of people are giving him advice, and a lot of it is logical, but it shouldn't negate his own experience and existence. I would really like to see some backlash, not just to him but also his friends and especially his family. The way his father scolded him annoyed me, it was ungrateful and condescending.
Well now there are this comments saying this and that, finally lith is growing up from the shadows of his past he's evolving and trying to give himself a chance. I like the story progression and the author is doing a damn good JOB, I hope he doesn't listen to some comments about childish shits. It's so damn rare to read a good story on this website please continue đ.
I like that Lith is growing emotionally, but the fact that for every single trouble he has there is always "mom" solus there to explain it all to him really kills it for me. How can someone grow if how should they feel and act is spoon fed to them by somebody else? Yes he is growing in a good direction but it's all feels slightly forced/too rapid.
the character growth is awesome, and I like the story path of the MC so far, but the process feels so forced. Reaction of friends and family was far too uniform, unreasoned, ill-defined, and over-the-top. Lith's acceptance and changes are too abrupt and easy, with too little uncertainty and wrestling. many of the circumstances feel forced and contrived, as if to force these lessons without actual organic growth. The character's development seems really cool and worthwhile. This is hard to do well, or balance. the process feels forced, incomplete, and contrived, and I understand how hard that can be from a creative perspective. Keep going author; I like this story and it's characters. I'll keep rooting for you!