Sonet
this was great until the random anti dark force league thing started. i think a 2nd transmigrator opposed to the mc isnt good in most cases. in the cases where it is good, its a murder-mystery type of thing or 2 transmigrators both knowingly opposing each other from the start. this version just completely derails the good plot you had going so far.
I think this stories got worst since he run out from his parents home,i mean its ok if you want to run. But you know it aint safe out there. If its me,i just gonna go to black house(safe house) and do some potion with my brother rathar than going so far away just to visit some animal,well dragon actualy. But what for?
Well even if it hurt our dear author emetionly a must say I am really disppointed with this idea of other transmigrator I will not say that like this It will go to **** etc. but I do not really know if I want to continue read this (I know author you do not care). Well atleast like this I can stop reading this becouse I ahev soure taste right now and perhaps I will contiunu reading after month.
Uh... all that comotion of not making the MC OP, and you bring his other half wich is totaly OP? I mean, if hes so knowledgable, why cant he fix his legs? Why cant he use his power to get rich? Heck, the guy could calculate how long it would take for him to be powerfull right? Even if it takes more time, eventualy he could turn into the most powerfull wizard in the world right? So what has he been doing all this time? Only complaining and being jealous of draco? And why does he care so much about him but doesnt mind hurting all those close to him? He literaly slaved several ***** wizards didnt he? That to me sounds very powerfull, he can also talk to dragons, he could easily control a set ammount of people to give him dragon eggs from the blackmarket... Heck, if he at this point doesnt have a fantasy army of monsters and creatures or a large organization of minions. I will be very disapointed...
This sounds like it has to be handled a certain way. An actual antagonist instead of a guy that shows up irregularly to inexplicably block the protagonist with 100% perfect knowledge and plans. I'm guessing you are aiming for L from Death Note. That's not a bad thing, the explanations just have to corroborate everything he does. But on a side note, this does sound like the perfect badguy to explain everything after the fact. He sounds that arrogant.
Before volume 2- great , after - waste of time . Please rewrite it , it's obvious that you have skills but bringing another transmigrator is even worse then using cultivation . Didn't you say that you won't do that because it's stupid! Another part: using made up useless character and binding her with MC , not only are you destroying harem plot you've been building , you are also mocking every Harry Potter fan who envision their favorite females HP characters as best fit for MC. Btw. WHITE HAIR , why the heck would you change his perfect blonde hair!!!!