Comments of chapter undefined of World Domination System
World Domination System
KillerHemboy
Chapter comments213
I can only see things getting out of control with mc making a group with only commoners who are oppressed soon. Even if they will swear and oath and thus can’t harm mc. They’ll still have that discrimination against nobles, or rather, people who has a higher status than them. For example, I can already see them beating up or even killing anyone with status if they see one wether they’re bad or good, they’ll just do it. Or, cursing the guards because they work for the side of people with higher status even though it’s just their job, and they also, need to make money. What I’m trying to say is, the faction mc will create is going to be filled with people with revenge, not justice. So, mc is just going to repeat the same cycle in the end, instead of the nobles being on top, this time it’s the commoners. Mc won’t be able to change anything if he creates a group with revenge hungry people. I really hope he will train them to have discipline and moral codes that’ll make them into good soldiers instead of hungry animals of the bottom of the food chain that will just become the hunter they’re so afraid off once they taste blood for the first time.
Love the chapter I only wish the actions were not seized into paragraphs like the enchantments, meetings and so on. Those looked like interesting conversations and actions to read about and I still feel Faxul feels more like a plot prop than a close character especially given his role and the foreshadowing of an ally since his intro. I know he is quiet but most chapters just "tell" me about him but do not "show" me him. But oh well, I still love this book.
Another issue here, the battles, emotions and other important things don't portray what it should feel like. They seem bland, an exception can be the youngest prince and MC fight. Faxul also feels bland, like a plot character, the feeling of a close friend ain't there. He's like a 1 dimensional character that doesnt have substance. He feels more of a force character. Currencies and figures should be properly planned before usage. Example, time to cast spell was 5 mins? It's way too long for people of their level and it's not even legendary spell, even the dragon spell in the beginning was better depicted. Cost of item in the system store seems to change drastically to suit current situation. Beginning, it cost Mc a few dozens of Exp (including loan costs) to get items in the first grade, even PAM-2 upgrade isnt as expensive as the current grade 1 mods. School grade potential treatments is all the same, so what's the essence of separating them? They give them the same things, same treatment, nothing special, all have houses given by the school. Back to my main point, certain scenes when writing has to make one feel it. Either way, good story and I'll continue reading, I know there will be improvements as this is just the beginning of the book.
The story, again is good. But the plot, I can only say it's very disappointing. I cant believe that in the whole libary, there are no books about enchantment? Then what books do the teachers use in tea himg the year 2 to 6? The grand court mage do use the libary at times or someone who monitors the place, I'm not sure. Either way, there cant be separate libraries for every year, it makes no sense. And MC has access to about 80% of the whole libary, the remaining been restricted only to the grand court mage and higher or so it was stated. And why dont we get interaction between students (seniors and juniors, especially in open places like libary, it's like the whole school consists of year 1. There are many bad plots, if I keep listing, I'll be writing a long essay.
