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(Re-writing)In Marvel; I'm a Cartoonist

(Original book's author= Renz_Udquin https://www.webnovel.com/profile/4314967471?appId=10) (Link to original: https://www.webnovel.com/book/marvel-i’m-a-cartoonist_21694636805049605) I found this story that was very long, but had been very poorly written. I decide that to improve my own writing skills I will now go through the original book and do my best to re-write it. (Please be aware that cringe is expected) Original book synopsis below; Hulk: Hulk is invincible! Saitama: Can you let me? I’m going to the supermarket to buy specials. Thanos: I see, I conquer! Lord Boros: The duel between the overlords, I have been looking forward to it for a long time! Devourer: Earth, I’ll eat it. Kakarot: Can’t you eat something else? Batman: I want to get rid of the Gotham Gang. JOJO: Today I want to become a gangster star here! General Zod: Krypton will return to its glory on the earth! Six Path Naruto: Dude, this is your relative. Clark: . . .

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Chapter 4-Galactus' daughter is a Lolita

Walking out of the once Tengman comics now Marvel Comics is located, Lucien looked up at the sun.

"The future will belong to Marvel."-Lucien said with pride. Ain't that a bit convoluted.

"Hiss!"-Lucien's eyes burnt from looking at the sun like a dummy.

Lucien hurriedly lowered his head and rubbed his eyes, pretending that dirt or something had flown into them instead.

It was near noon. The traffic on the street had become more crowed. Lucien walked down the street towards a nearby restaurant. The scorching heat of summer had made his pace faster as he could feel himself starting to sweat.

"Welcome."-A waiter that stood by the entrance invited him inside with a polite smile.

Lucien had chose a location within the restaurant near the glass window, so he could see the hurried pedestrians walking about their lives.

"Sir, this is the menu. Let me know when your ready to order."-The waiter gave a smile as they gave Lucien the menu.

Lucien picked up the menu and ordered a few dishes at random. This was a Chinese restaurant, and the taste was simply divine as it was also the same type of food he had eaten before being transmigrated.

"Cuckoo."

While Lucien was eating his delicious food, he heard a sound coming from something hungry. Looking up at the glass window he saw a loli wearing a purple dress standing outside staring at the food on his table. The corners of her mouth were becoming damp as she licked the outside of her lips.

"Cuckoo."

Another sound came from the Loli's belly. Lucien was stunned. She was so hungry that the noise from her stomach was going through the glass. Was she some starving goddess.

The Loli stared at the meal on the table from behind the glass without evading her gaze even after being caught by Lucien showing how extremely eager she was to eat.

"Come in."-Lucien waved to her with a smile.

Perhaps it was because she was too hungry to think clearly, but the little Lolita wasn't afraid of this stranger and actually walked on in and came to the table.

"You may eat it."

"Waiter, can we get another dish please."

Lucien discovered that little Lolita had a temperament like an old lady, but still revealed a bit of timidity, and her face was neat and clean. Lucien wondered whose daughter had run away from home.

"Suction flow."

Little Lolita immediately gobbled up the new dishes being brought to her. It seemed that she had been hungry for a long time. Lucien kindly said after seeing this-"What's your name? Where do you live? You should go home after eating."

"My name is Gali"-Gali opened her mouth and said.

(Living on Earth, Gali or rather Galacta is the estranged daughter of the mighty World-Devourer known as Galactus and like her father she has an insatiable appetite for life-force energies. But unlike her father, Gali has found other ways to sate her appetite without having to destroy entire worlds.)

The food in front of Gali fascinated her. She had never eaten such a delicious food. If it contains high energy, she is not as picky as her father, Galactus.

It didn't take long for Lucien to take a deep breath, because even after serving three dishes, they all fell into Gali's stomach, but she still ate them again. You must know that these dishes are almost all meat, it would seem that Gali's stomach is a bottomless pit.

Gali seemed to feel Lucien's gaze on her. Gali put down the bowl as soon as her movements were stagnant, and bowed her head in embarrassment weakly-"I'm full."

'No, your eyes are shining and you are not full.'

"Let us just finish eating."

"Thank you."

Gali was overjoyed when she heard the words, and stared at Lucien blankly, making him speechless.

'He is not a charity, and it is impossible to invite people to dinner for free forever.'

"Okay, go back now."-Lucien rubbed Gali's head as he got up, and walked out calmly.

Gali also got up slowly, her eyes flickering as she followed Lucien's back.

Walking out of the street, Lucien was going to return to his residence to finish the first season of 'One Punch Man', but he felt that the little worm behind him that was following.

There was really no way he could ignore it. Lucien turned around and bent down slightly, and asked helplessly, "Gali, where are your parents?"

"I don't have a mother, I only have a father, but he is not here."

Gali was a little embarrassed by his question, and quickly explained.

'This kid…'-When Lucien heard it, it turned out that Gali's mother had already passed away, so she guessed that she might be separated from her father.

'Yeah, yeah, this is made sense.'

Just as Lucien stroked his forehead, Gali raised her head firmly and said: "I have no family on earth anymore, is it okay if I follow you?"

As soon as this was said, the scene fell into silence, the passing pedestrians were still noisy, but these two people were in completely different places.

'Does the earth have no family? Are they dead?'

Lucien's face began to change. He looked at Gali with sympathy and pity, and said in secret: 'No wonder you are hungry like this.'

Lucien knew that if his father hadn't left a lot of inheritance to him it would not long after he died that Lucien would join him.

At this moment, he saw Gali squinting at his back, and quickly turned his head to look at her eyes wide.

"Hey–!"

A heavy truck suddenly rushed out from the crossroads of the street, and the trailing carriage directly flicked its tail on the car next to it. The wheels rubbed against the ground and made a harsh sound. A little spark splashed from it, causing pedestrians around to scream and flee. The heavy truck drove very fast, and within a few seconds, it rammed the street and rushed in the direction of Lucien.

"Cào."-Lucien cursed secretly, and it was indeed true that such an incident just had to happened on his first day in the Marvel world.

("F***" (the verb) can be directly translated into Chinese as (cào))

Barely waiting for a moment after seeing the danger, he pulled up Gali's little white hand and started running wildly to safety.

But as soon as Lucien pulled Gali up, an unnoticeable wave to ordinary people suddenly burst out of Gali's body, and the world around her escaped into black and white.

Everything lost its brilliance, everything was stopped including Lucien, and the only one who could act was little Lolita.

A purple light flashed in her eyes.

"Hey——!"

Time recovered, and there was a scream of tingling scalp in reality.

A horrifying scene happened under the eyes of everyone present, and saw that the heavy truck that had been running wildly started to drift in place and rotated 360 degrees. This apparently inconsistent with the logic of the incident appeared in front of them.

Could it be that the driver has controlled it?

Pedestrians fled around, not wanting to give their lives to others.

The same is true for Lucien.

He took Gali directly and walked in the other direction. It didn't take long for him to stop a taxi and drive home.

On the way, Lucien was shocked and horrified for a few seconds. It was the first time that he faced horror. You must know that he was just a very good citizen in his previous life.

The first time he was hit by a drifting car, it was only a few seconds before he was hit to death. I must be frightened, but the thought that this was the Marvel Universe, the villain hadn't even gotten to appeared before him and he was frightened.

What a shame to the traveler.

He is just an ordinary person now.

Only a lottery can give him confidence, otherwise this day is not for people.

Lucien, with a wry smile, realised that he was still holding Gali's little hand and let go.

"Now, what?"-Gali pulled his sleeve, looking at him hopefully.

"Uh, all right sure. You can stay with me."-With a mess of his mind, Lucien agreed in a daze, not knowing what it was in store for him.

'Perhaps it is better to have a companion than a person after a disaster.'

The chapters are sooooo long ahh.

But none da less I work hard so priase me.

Next chapter will be in three days though as school work has piled up and I'm doing my best, though hope everyone enjoys this

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