Review Detail of Broke_Sloth in Gud virus

Chapter reviewed: 1-6 (Note to the author: I can clearly see potential in the story, just keep improving your writing, and I can almost guarantee you will attract many readers dedicated to this genre of books. This review is meant to highlight a few problems I found, and is not a hate comment. This comment is not written to dismay you by any means, rather I want to point out some areas where improvements are required and hope you can use it as a point of reference to improve). A very refreshing concept so far in this site bloated with 'system' novels, but that's all I can say for now. The concept of the story is very interesting, and the potential is clearly there. However, there are major problems evident even in the earliest chapter. First of all, the writing is very chaotic and all over the place i.e, the prose needs work. The grammar is also not very good, however the author can improve that by getting an editor or learning proper grammar. Secondly, I can't comment on the characters, as it is very early to judge, however the characters I have seen so far have been wasted imo (could've done some stuff better). I also find the 'fights' so far to be kind of bland? I can see many ways to improve it, but I will refrain from commenting more, as there is not much to judge from. Those are the most glaring issues I found so far, and I hope you focus on fixing them slowly. If you need any advice in writing, or a helping hand in editing, you can always hit me up. I'd love to lend a hand to a book with such potential. I shall wait patiently for any future updates.