Review Detail of _Pochitalover_ in DxD Issei the Gamer

The story is not bad, I would give it 4 stars, because the system seems good to me and the MC is not a pervert hungry for female flesh, the characters are solid and I like the detail that the MC's parents seem to care about him, and have critical thinking, instead of being brain dead NPC's, but this story needs a huge amount of editing, URGENTLY. 40% of the sentences are cut in half, leaving the rest separated into different paragraphs, example: Hello my name is Jeff. That's extremely annoying to read, especially for me, because English is not my mother tongue and sometimes I find it hard to understand what the fuck some characters mean. Otherwise, good start, an entertaining story that I can recommend if you have some free time, 3.8 stars and if the author corrects the mentioned mistakes, then I will delete this review and give it 4 stars.