The idea for the story is great. The dialogues are great. The humor is great. There are many descriptions that are great. However, there is quite a bit of bloated writing. Many sentences are not needed and I would rather read the monologue of the MC and what the system says and skip reading all the rest. It that wasn't a problem, I would give it 5 stars.
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