Review Detail of luffy1996 in My life turned into a Dating Sim Game
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I am dropping the fic because it's obvious this is a self insert with Shirou's name. ________________________________ I would change your title from dating Sim to romance system. Because dating Sim systems are barebones but you obviously copy pasted the system from The Gamer and added a dating sim on top of it. ___________________________________ The system rewards are also not too my liking in a fic. they are designed to give the MC the OP power of the week regardless of how the Fateverse feels about things. The rewards are things like mystic eyes or even haki from One Piece... as long as there is a cool power, the system rewards it. __________________________________ The dating Sim has save slots and allows you to go multiple routes that it claims are mutually exclusive. It just ends up feeling like the setting has no true meaning and that this could easily be an original if the names were changed. __________________________________ TLDR, another case of Good idea but no idea how to execute it. The author tried to write a fanfic and an original at the same time and ended up detracting from both.
My life turned into a Dating Sim Game
Chaddius
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the reason I dropped while giving criticism here was two-fold: 1. so that you might improve from it 2. So that new readers can better educate themselves on what your story is, so they don't have to read to find out they don't like it.
Chaddius:I’m not sure what you were replying, either you delete your own comment or it’s getting banned by WN. Nonetheless, my opinion still stands, I miss the part where that’s my problem. Your issue is yours, not mine. I will not take on someone else's problem.
Chaddius:I’m not sure what you were replying, either you delete your own comment or it’s getting banned by WN. Nonetheless, my opinion still stands, I miss the part where that’s my problem. Your issue is yours, not mine. I will not take on someone else's problem.