Review Detail of Luxuriant in Star Wars: General of Clones
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This is a rewrite of my previous rewrite! Lol. Nevertheless after taking a break, I felt like I kind of perfected my writing to an extent, the story should be more realstic, main character should be more interesting and the grammar should be much better! Well that’s all anyways, if you have any complains or questions, just lmk!
Star Wars: General of Clones
Luxuriant
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if you leave the cheezy butt buddy stuff with anakin out and don't make the jedi supervise him, since he can tell them to fk off since he is palpies boy and no padawan bs. you have unlimited possibilities. make him more of a military man and build up the relationship between him and the clones. otherwise, you're just waiting yours and our time to rewrite
I see your point about that, but I feel like their should be a main dynamic between Silas and another character. So you think I should take out the dynamic between him and Anakin, but how can I replace that? Perhaps I could use the clones, but at best he has Commander Cody, and if we’re being honest not many clones are interesting. However, you think I should focus more on the Military dynamic between him and the clones? Wouldn’t that make the story too serious? How about this, I’ll keep the dynamic between Anakin and Silas, but I’ll severely edit it and make it more realistic and less cheezy🤔
Brezer:if you leave the cheezy butt buddy stuff with anakin out and don't make the jedi supervise him, since he can tell them to fk off since he is palpies boy and no padawan bs. you have unlimited possibilities. make him more of a military man and build up the relationship between him and the clones. otherwise, you're just waiting yours and our time to rewrite
Luxuriant:I see your point about that, but I feel like their should be a main dynamic between Silas and another character. So you think I should take out the dynamic between him and Anakin, but how can I replace that? Perhaps I could use the clones, but at best he has Commander Cody, and if we’re being honest not many clones are interesting. However, you think I should focus more on the Military dynamic between him and the clones? Wouldn’t that make the story too serious? How about this, I’ll keep the dynamic between Anakin and Silas, but I’ll severely edit it and make it more realistic and less cheezy🤔
