Review Detail of Joao_Pires in Reincarnated as Ancestor of a Great Clan

Item: Reincarnated as Ancestor of a Great Clan
Rating: 4

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Joao_PiresLv45mthJoao_Pires

The story looks interesting but it suffers from over-description. For example, you introduce an idea and then proceed to expand it by writting exactly the same but with more complex words. At least a quarter of the chapter is repeted or redundant information.

Reincarnated as Ancestor of a Great Clan

Drake_20043257

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Drake_20043257AuthorDrake_20043257

Just bear with me for the first 30 chapters, as I lay the groundwork for the story. After that, I'll shift to the real narrative without over-description.

5mth

Joao_PiresLv4Joao_Pires

The novel "Overlord: The Dragon Monarch", suffers the same problem as you.

5mth

Joao_PiresLv4Joao_Pires

I also noticed that you sometimes mix first and third person in the same sentence. It's not a lot of times but it breaks the flow. I commented those that I noticed in case you want to edit.

Drake_20043257:Just bear with me for the first 30 chapters, as I lay the groundwork for the story. After that, I'll shift to the real narrative without over-description.

5mth