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There are flaws but I like this.Sometimes it does feel rushed but it's just beginning so I hope you improve as you write more.I suggest something from cultivation Novels too can make interesting like that Phenix bloodline from ATG is a good one to have.I don't know how it works though as I am not a fan of those "I ,your father" type novels.Also show some conversation with his family and peerage members and not make people think it's a diary.We have to speculate some so show his wholesome moments with family too.This way even if you are villain we can see his motives as sometimes Villains are more complex than hero and make him more scheming like Aizen.No need to just brute force on his enemies.He can Humiliate Issei more like he can also talk to Gremory family or phoenix family about Issei behavior or do something more drastic but orchestrate it like why a Grafiya only interferes only when Riser is about to do something but Issei can shout whenever he wants ..I mean there are some places you just skipped over

DXD: The Awakening Of Phenex

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I appreciate the constructive criticisms, they are very valuable.